Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers
Week of 05-31 through 06-06-2016
Thank you Barbara Taylor for supplying our prompt photo this week!
Train Wreck
Allison sat on the bench enjoying the view of the city.
She was recalling the events of the previous week when Adam’s car stalled on the railroad tracks, his seat belt stuck, and a train coming.
He yelled for her to get out of the car, but she frantically tried to help him.
Adam pushed her toward the door and told her to run!
She ran, stumbled and hit her head knocking herself out. When she regained consciousness, she saw the car split in half.
Startled, she jumped when Adam touched her on the shoulder holding sandwiches and drinks for their lunch.
“What’s wrong Allison? he asked.
“Nothing, I was just enjoying the view and feeling very grateful that you were able to get your seatbelt unbuckled in time to run for safety when our car stalled on the railroad tracks last week.
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Copyright © 2016 Written by Jessie Cross ~ All rights reserved
OK I didn’t see that coming. Lucky to be able to tell about train buying your car
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Yes, that’s probably in itself! 😊
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Wheew, and Adam was safe. What a close call. I’m glad for the happy ending Jc. 🙂
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Thank you! 😊
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Oh what a great twist at the end! I was sure that he was a goner! ☺
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Thank you! It was kind of a last minute thought.
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Phew! That’s a relief!! I’m guess from that day on, things around them will be more meaningful since they got a second chance at life. 🙂 Great story, Jessie.
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Thank you! 🙂 Yes, I would imagine life is very precious to them now, more than ever!
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Whew! What a close call! I thought it would end up with it being a dream at the end but it was true! I would consider him a very lucky guy! Great story, Jessie!
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Thank you ,Joy! My sister’s brother-in-law was not so lucky. His truck did not make it across the tracks in time and it killed him. That happened a long time ago.
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Oh, that is horrible! Poor guy!!
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😦 I’m so sorry.
That’s one of the benefits of being a writer…we can make the ending has a positive effect. I like how you did that here.
Ellespeth
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Lots of suspense, a bad dream scenario! Interesting take on the prompt. 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Happy he escaped to. That would give you bad dreams and daydreams for awhile. Nice write Jessie.
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Thank you! I would imagine driving across a railroad track now would be a constant reminder for a very long time.
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Nicely done Jessie, I think your subject is one of the great nightmares of everyone’s life, stuck on the railway tracks.
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Thank you! Yes, and I think about this even when I am stopped in traffic waiting for a train to pass because if I were near the track and something happened, my being in the close proximity would be very dangerous. I waited for a train to pass just yesterday and it seemed like the railroad cars were traveling at least 90 miles an hour!
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Phew! That was a close call!
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Yes, a little too close! 😟
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Wow, scared me there! I’m glad he survived too though! Great story 🙂
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Thank you! 😊
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