Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Week of 04-05 through 04-11-2016

This week’s photo prompt is provided by


“Is this the house?”  Rob asked.

“Yes, Steel answered.  “It looks like the colored photo the old woman was showing her friend on the bus.  Here’s the key behind this red foliage.”

Rob and Steel entered the house, put several items in a bag, then began opening the safe with a blowtorch to avoid setting off the alarm.

Suddenly, the front door opened and there stood the old woman who was on the bus.

Rob and Steel started running passed her but she kicked Rob with her foot, sped around and gave Steel a karate chop, and quickly pulled her gun out and pointed  it  at them.

Seconds later, the police came in and arrested Rob and Steel.

Detective Ralph Smart removed his old woman disguise and said everyone in the neighborhood would be so relieved to learn of the arrests.

Words (140)

Copyright © 2016 Written by Jessie Cross ~ All rights reserved


17 thoughts on “THE OLD WOMAN

  1. Great twist. You are so good at putting these little twists at the end of your stories. I enjoyed thinking of the detective catching the thieves dressed up as a Mrs. Doubtfire like elderly woman. At first O thought this elderly woman was actually waling on these two thieves. Lol. Nice write Jessie.


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