FLASH FICTION FOR THE PURPOSEFUL PRACTITIONER…..week #5 – 2016
CHARISMA
“Well, it’s about time you answered the door, Lewy!” Dawson blurted out when the door opened.
“Sorry,” Dawson said sheepishly.
“I’m staying here in the condo for a while. There will be no more traveling from town to town.”
“What do you mean? What about Charisma?”
“I’m tired of her. She always steals the show and no one ever looks at me!”
“Why do you have a large duffle bag packed then?”
“Answer me!”
“I destroyed her,” he said in a low voice.
Dawson looked at the large duffle bag and said, “Lewy! You’re not telling me she’s in that bag are you?”
“Yes, I got really upset and I just wanted to get rid of her as fast as possible.”
Dawson carefully opened the duffle bag and gasped out loud.
He picked up the bag and shoved it into Lewy’s lap.
“Here! You better get busy and sew her back together. Afterall, you are the best ventriloquist in the world, and she is just a dummy!”
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Copyright © 2016 Written by Jessie Cross ~ All rights reserved
Great story Jessie. I really thought he was talking about his wife’s/girlfriend’s body. I was thinking this sounds pretty horrific for Jessie lol. I’m glad it was only a dummy and that even though he was mad at the dummy, he could sew her back together. No harm, no foul. Thank goodness.
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Thanks, Mandi! 🙂 Your right…blood and guts is just not my style. Who knows though, I may throw in a real zinger one day. 🙂
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Haha! It would such a surprise lol
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I enjoyed the ending although you did have me going there for a minute thinking the duffel bag is full of Charisma’s parts. I laughed when I discovered Charisma was a dummy. 😀 Nicely told.
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Thank you, Yinglan. I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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My pleasure.
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Hugh relief. No harmful for a fit of anger that can’t be fixed with a few hours of work. Not all temper tantrums are that harmless.
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Oh! If they only were all harmless, that would be awesome. We can mend, but not as fast as a sew up job. 🙂
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LOL! I was prepared! I knew it! LOL!
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Oh no! You found me out! So glad it was an enjoyable read for you. Thank you! 🌞
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🌞 Love the teeny sun!
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I didn’t expect it to be a dummy! Great twist! Great story! 😀
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Ha! Ha! Didn’t want to use a real person……glad you enjoyed it.😁
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Woah! That scared me for a second. I really thought this would turn out to be a gruesome story (although that would be equally exciting!). Nice twist and clever take, Jessie! 😀
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Thank you! Happy to have escaped the really gruesome scene. Glad you enjoyed it. 😃
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You never know, one day you might be inclined to write something gruesome… You hinted at it so well! I am pleased that it was only a dummy in the end.
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Gruesome….maybe..there probably is a story in my head somewhere on that order. 😁. Happy you liked the ending. 😊
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Oh, I love the idea that Charisma is so real to him that he got jealous of her. Fab story 🙂
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Yes! That’s some real jealously! Thank you, so glad you enjoyed it.😊
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Hahaha! Great surprise ending! I really thought it was a real person! Loved it!
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So glad you enjoyed it! Thank you! 😊
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I did! 🙂
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Great twist! Fun read! 🙂
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Thanks you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 😊
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Excellent story! I was really concerned there for a moment. I’m glad it was just a dummy in that bag!
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Thank so much! 🙂 Thank you for reading and commenting.
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You got me!! What a great story!!
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Thank you! I’m glad to have surprised you and you enjoyed it. 🙂
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You’re most welcome.
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Great twist at the end! Well done — had me believing Charisma was real — just like Lewy!
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Good! It worked! 😀 Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it.
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Whew!
DJ
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Phew! Not as gory an end as I was imagining 🙂
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No, just a few clean cuts! Thank you for reading and commenting. 🙂
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Brilliantly done Jessie.
Very engaging twist and story.
XD
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Thank you, so glad you enjoyed it! 🙂
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Great twist. Made the story. Thanks.
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Thank you! I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
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Thank you!😊
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Great story with a twist at the end. Left me laughing.:)
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So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you! 😊
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Great twist, Jessie. I was worried the bag was going to be filled with human body parts for a while there! At least Charisma is fixable. 🙂
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it. If he sews her up, he can keep working!
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Thank you! She will back to work real soon. 😀
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