Guide for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers
1. A prompt photo will be provided each Tuesday to be used as a base to your story. Please include photo prompt with your story.
2. Linking for this challenge begins on Tuesday and runs to the following Tuesday.
3. Please credit photo to photographer
4. The story word limit is 100 – 150 words (+ – 25 words). Please try and stay within this limit.
This week’s photo prompt is provided by pixabay.com
Quick Action
Truman called Deena on his cell phone. He said, “do you see me?”
Deena looked around and spotted him saying, “yes, you are the goofy guy trying to buy a child’s balloon, right?”
“No, I’m the strikingly handsome guy standing out in the crowd,” he replied.
“Oh! Alright Mr. Handsome, I’ll meet you inside the Lover’s Lane,” she softly replied.
“Wonderful, because I have your heart,” he said.
Truman thought he arrived there first because there was no sign of Deena, so he sat on a bench near the entrance to the Lover’s Lane to wait for her.
He was wondering why it was taking her so long to get there when he heard an ambulance and saw a crowd gathered quite a distance from him. He immediately ran toward the crowd in fear that Deena could be involved.
As he edged his way into the crowd he saw Deena crouched down on the ground. She was administering CPR on an elderly woman. The woman was responding by the time the medics arrived.
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Copyright © 2015 Written by Jessie Cross ~ All rights reserved
Great story Jessie! Deena was detained because she was saving a life! A happy ending. 🙂 Thank you for participating in the FFfAW challenge!
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Thank you , Joy. It’s always nice to have people around that knows how to save a life. Sometimes you are just in the right place at the right time.
I enjoy participating in the challenges and very pleased that you are hosting it. Thank you, I look forward to them.
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Thank you Jessie!
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I’m glad she was only late because she was saving a life and not because her own life was in danger! Nicely done, Jessie. 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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*wheew*, i was so scared it was deena who needed the cpr. Love the dialogues in this story, made it so much better
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting, I’m glad you enjoyed it. Deena was going to be the one in need of help, but my mind took a turn and for some reason I thought it best that she be the one giving aid.
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Oh goody she wasn’t in trouble and she didn’t ditch the guy. Good story
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Thank you. They are deeply in love. 😊
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Deena’s actions in helping to save someone’s life are commendable. It was a relief to know she hadn’t been in some kind of accident and was delayed by doing something so wonderful. I could feel Truman’s dread that his Deena had been hurt. Well done, Jessie.
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Thanks Millie! It’s good to have your anxiety put to rest and Truman was in need of it after probably thinking the worse .
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Nice! If someone doesn’t make it to a meetup that’s about the best reason possible. If I were Truman I’d think, “Yep. She’s a keeper.” Great story!
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Thanks so much. We tend to think on the negative side of things when we are wondering what’s causing a delay…I wanted to turn it toward the positive. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Nicely written, Jessie! Great romantic dialogue, too, showing how well your characters know each other. The suspense was just enough.
Ellespeth
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Thank you. I enjoyed putting in that little dialogue at the beginning of the story and ending on a positive note.
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I have seen these sorts of cell phone conversations at the grocery store – usually young men getting precise directions to a particular item 🙂
The conversation and the images of the final outcome helped develop your characters…to invite the reader to know more. I struggle with this facet of writing – sometimes I tend to be more descriptive – scene/mood – and I lose some of the character’s ways.
Ellespeth
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I like what you’ve done here Jessie. its leading up to tragedy but then we have Deena the hero at the end – well done!
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Thank you! 😊
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