Mondays Finish the Story – Aug. 17th, 2015
Finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday!
OPERATION
I see absolutely everything!
Yes, I know everyone thinks I am under sedation and my eyelids are mostly closed, but I am unresponsive. Therefore, they began with the operation.
My heart pounds in my ears louder than a ten piece drum set. I desperately struggle to open my mouth, move my legs, arms, hands, anything to get their attention! My fight to alert them is completely useless.
The doctor stands there with the surgical tool in his hand while the others silently stand by waiting to assist him with the operation.
I feel I am about to die from horrific fear and the most agonizing pain imaginable.
Wait! I see, through blurred eyes, one of them pointing out the flood of tears washing down my face!
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Copyright © 2015 Written by Jessie Cross ~ All rights reserved
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What a frightening prospect, thank God for tears! Well done!
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Thank you! Yes, tears are very helpful in a lot of ways.
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Here’s another angle I didn’t think of.
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That’s scary. I think their was a horror flick about that a few years ago. Great suspense. Thank God for tears!
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Thank you. This type of thing did really happen…but the guy was actually operated on and he had no way to let them know until afterwards.
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Scary!
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Great story and observant nurse in the Op room. Thanks for writing again for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge and be well… ^..^
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Thank you, I appreciate the compliment. I love the challenges!
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That makes me very happy LuckyJC!
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Oh my gosh that would be frightening! To be about to go under the knife and you are not under. I cannot even try to imagine! (I know how much it hurts when you wake up from an operation and I sure wouldn’t want to be awake during the operation!) Great story Jessie!
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Thank you so much. This was not an actual story of someone I know, however, there was a guy that was operated on sometime back that this actually happened to…it was on the news. Our oldest son is very concerned that he could be in this type of situation one day….he has a very difficult time of whenever he has work done on his teeth…he has to be given twice as much medication than what is usually called for.
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It’s horrible to think of someone having to go through that. I don’t blame your son for having that fear, everyone should have a little bit of that fear. Thankfully, it has never happened to me. I have been in the dentist when they started work and I wasn’t deadened enough. I made them stop real fast. Haha! So I understand your son’s concern.
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It gave me shivers. Imagining to see you being cut open. Beautifully described the situation. When words don’t come out, tears do the job. Excellent ending
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Thank you! It would be a horrible thing to experience.
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Nice direction you’ve taken the prompt! I enjoyed reading your story.
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Thank you. I appreciate your reading and commenting.
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Frightening prospect!! Thank goodness, someone was paying attention. Well done!
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Thank you so much. Strange things do happen!
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It is frightening that this can happen sometimes, thank goodness for those tears, great writing.
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Yes, that would really be a problem! Thank you for reading and commenting.
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I’m glad they noticed! I’ve always had a fear about having an operation and not falling asleep but being unable to move.
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Yes, that would be horrible, and it has happened.
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Truly terrifying! Loved the way you used prompt
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Thanks so much!
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Very scary! I can’t imagine if I were her. Great story, loved it.
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So glad you enjoyed it. 😃
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A very nerve-tingling realistic description ~ I would hate to even be close to the situation you describe here Jessie ~ A unique response to the prompt 🙂
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Thank you! I can’t imagine having to be in that sitution such as that..it made me cringe even when I wrote it!😱
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Truly horrifying! And well-told 🙂
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Thank you very much!
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What a truly horrifying prospect! I’m glad the tears were spotted before the operation began. Well done, Jessie. 🙂
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Thank you so much! 😊
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Reads the story, hits the like button, swallows dryly. Enough said. 🙂
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Absolutely. Thank you!
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Nicely done Jessie- this reminded of those dreams you have where you’re paralysed but can still see/hear what’s happening around you.
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Thank you so much. Dreams can be really scary and seem so real. I’ve had some that were so bad I was so grateful when I woke up and realized it was a bad dream and just laid there feeling so relieved that I woke up and the dream was gone!
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Thank you for stopping by mine to read Willie’s story~ I enjoyed yours with its “patient” angle 🙂
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Thank you! 😐
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Thank God for the tears. Nice story, scary!
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